How to write lousy

“I’m a HUGE fan of the ________.”

Fill in the blank with Metropolitan Opera, Chicago Bears, Los Angeles Dodgers or similar.

The problems are:

(A) You’re probably much closer to average than you realize.

(B) It reads like it’s been written by an obnoxious, boasting child.

(C) Your enthusiasm aside, it contains little information.

Here are some alternatives that convey much more information.

— I’ve been following the _________ since I was 10 years old.

— I’m a season ticktet holder of the _________.

— I take my annual vacation in _________ to attend ________.

Enough already with the HUGE fans.

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